plz,read it
i looked to ur face
when u said the last word
i felt iam in race
that my tears became crystalize as gold
my strength betray me
my heart pain me
because my darling foresake me
ur eyes was different
ur ******** was rough
ur sights was malevolent
?!!while u are telling me u don't wanna me
i will never stop,i will never cry
i will put our story in envelope
let our dead love ,quickly die
i will forget u
because i really love u
i will forgive u
when u return to me
because u will not find,girl will love u as i do

Very Go0o0o0od
But you must practice the tenses more and more
(Try to rewrite it in the same tense)
:A6:

because u will not find,girl will love u as i do

It is very beautiful my dear
Go on

[*_^]

Are you boy or girl?

مشكور

i will never stop,i will never cry
i will put our story in envelope


wow katreen

you make me cry .... you are great poem

u r so nice .... & ur poem too

thanks for all of u about ur nice writing and words ....iam so happy that u like my writing
thanks anas 3003 for ur opnion
thank u ra2e2at al masha3er for ur note ,i will take it as rule thanks dear
thanks for rofida and vampire alot too
by the way ra2e2at al mashae3r iam a girl

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